It was a good halloween then we saw a house that looked rusty and rotten with bad wood but i was not scared of it we knocked on the door a old guy opened the door and then it was a vampire we ran for hour life's but it found my house and my dad attacked it then it knocked my dad out so i got a hammer and smacked it but it was unkillable so i called my friends to help but they got killed so i was so angry
I knew his weakness so i got a taser and killed him and threw him in the house and now my dad and friends a alive we had a happy ending.
Hello dragan I would like to comment on your post. This is very much like sharknado good job on the idea and publishing.
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ReplyDeleteI really love the way you have thoughtfully presented this amazing story has inspired me and has forced me to continue a career in writing
This is a very nice story but some things need a little bit of polishing just to make this a little bit better than this already is like the part where the vampire gets killed needs to be a bit more descriptive power.
Next time you write work on your punctuation and descriptiveness because you could do with some more.
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